Soldier boy jack

ok thanks guys i'll keep working on it

thank you every one who helped me with my grammar i really mean thanks because i know my grammar was and still is terrible but thanks for all the tips ...

don't worry the story will be update very shortly as we are both working on it as we speak

i wasn't very old when i first wrote this poem but i still love it i think its one of my best (lol)

this Poem also came into my head whilst i was listning to Shayne Ward

this came into my head whilst i was listning to shayne ward (random huh?)

Time went slowly by in school, i sat down and did my work, i couldn't concentrate and got told off by my teacher, that day time went slowly by in ...

wow that sent shivers down my body, you put in such powerful description i love all your work so far please keep going Gyr

your poem gives me a odd chilling feeling in my body i don't know what it is, but i know that its a great poem keep it up please (love ...

He sat with his head in his hands, wondering if he would ever feel whole, Thinking on what he had lost, and what he had never gained, He sat with ...

its got a good story line in it but i can't quite see the the beat of it keep up the good work though RoxanneR and i will, your my ...

apart from the typos its a really good poem i really really like it. (love Jack)

its really good theres not much more that i can say keep up the good work (love jack)

This is boring i know i was just very bord when i wrote this

thanks for that you, can't really say anything more